These are the links to my Significant Writing Project
Frischkorn Paper 3 rough draft
Copy of Frischkorn Paper 3 final draft Every
Framing Statement: I chose my second of three papers for my Significant Writing Project. Looking back at my rough draft, and my peers’ comments, I can see the significant change between drafts. My peers helped me strengthen my sentences to make them as impactful as they can be. On numerous occasions, I would have comments talking about how I need to lead into a quote better, or more thoroughly talk about a subject before jumping into a quote. Because my peers mentioned this certain issue, I made sure to read out loud my essay, making sure it flowed right. I have never had an issue with my introduction quote, on this paper among others, my peers have commented that I engage readers well, or that I have a good hook to draw readers in. Yet, what I do need to work on is the reorganization of my essay. I can give strong evidence through quotes to make my point. However, it is where I put these quotes and what context they are in that matter. Working on my final draft of paper 2, I made sure to not only add in powerful quotes but quotes that reiterate and bring to life my points. In terms of length, I added more to what I had. My thesis was of how sponsors shape child prodigies. I explained what a child prodigy is and what they could possibly become, a literacy success or a victim. I did not add more points, but I did go more in depth on the concepts I talked about. From my rough to final draft, I kept the same concepts, but went in depth and added more quotes. Thanks to the help of my peers and my own corrections, I was able to make my essay as good as it is.
